So much of this book is unintentional #body horror.
I’m looking for volunteers to critique bits of Biophone. The bits are all between about 700 and 1200 words, and shouldn’t take more than an hour to read through and leave comments on. You don’t need to be an English major or even consider yourself good at writing. The more eyes of varying knowledge and background I can get on this thing, the better it’ll turn out.
Your time is valuable. I’d be super grateful if you could contribute a few minutes of it to my project. <3
Let me know if you’re interested by emailing me at consolecadet @ gmail . com. If you’re not interested, please consider signal boosting. Thanks so much!
Unrelated to 50 Shades, but related to writing: I’m working on a near-future science fiction short story collection to release at the end of the summer. If you’re into providing critique (hopefully slightly more balanced than 50shadesofwhy’s) and want to take a look, shoot me an email.
If you’d like to see updates on the book, follow bernoff, my author blog. I post about it every couple of days.
…I would proof-read it, checking her spelling, adding and subtracting commas, cutting back on those bloody ellipses…and occasionally suggesting a tweak if I thought the meaning was unclear. We’d sworn we’d never work together in TV – as a producer she would have fired me that day I was directing The Bill and ran over by 30 minutes – but one evening a week we’d sit down together at her laptop and go through her latest instalment, and somehow we managed that for 18 months without killing each other. We did fall out once; I stomped off without finishing the chapter, and she published it anyway, and if any commas were in the wrong place, no one noticed. Whenever Erika encountered a story problem, she’d describe it, and I – being a bloke – would come up with a simple solution that was clear, elegant and always so utterly wrong she’d immediately devise her own. I don’t think she once followed a suggestion of mine.
—Niall Leonard, E.L. James’ husband
Poor, long-suffering Niall Leonard.
I’m oh-so-tired of compound adjectives beginning with ‘oh-so-‘.
The thing about punctuation is…it’s not all interchangeable…if you use it the wrong way people will notice—you can’t just forget to use periods for days and days…you’ll wind up with gigantic run-on sentences…like this…